@TheUltimatePlaneLover This makes perfect sense—the ETSF took their time before departing, with all due events taking place in the interim.
Moreover, this better sets the stage for the “Disconnect” Protocol.
@TheUltimatePlaneLover For a defensive mission, my opinion is to have the artillery conduct sustained harassment, focusing attacks on the runway and hangars.
The area-denial capability of the short-range rocket artillery is essentially a score-farming game against the massive number of aircraft parked on the ground. We can't wait for them to take off before engaging, right?
Since I don't have time to write, and since their command authority lies with you, you will be the one to write it. If you require them, long-range rocket artillery and tactical missiles are also available for deployment. You can simply include them in the writing.
@TheUltimatePlaneLover I have an exam imminent, so I don't have time to write out a full narrative. I'll simply state what happened.
The release of this piece signifies that ETSF has successfully landed and joined up with you. SCOURGE dispatched approximately 20 aircraft to intercept the transport ships, including laser-equipped units. All were eliminated without loss by the 6-plane Red Arrow Squadron, with each aircraft armed with five LT-15A long-range FT air-to-air missiles and two JP-2B auto-targeting gun pods. However, this also means the presence of the highly lethal JP-2B has been exposed; the current implications are unknown.
ETSF has replaced the BFX-11A with the BFX-13A and is tasked with supporting your operations.
We now need to decide on one issue: Should the artillery units conduct daily, sustained suppression of the bandit airfield, or launch a decisive, all-out assault at the start of the formal operation?
@Boeing727200F Wait, what? How would I know where the main island is? That’s part of the main quest…
Hold on, what I meant is, according to the setting, it’s already established that so many aircraft can be crammed onto one island. They’ve already gone this far with it—there’s no need to nitpick over details in the lore.
@Boeing727200F A single floating island in the Scourge's home turf is already crammed with so many aircraft—there's really no need to worry about details like that.
@Boeing727200F no. The excessive size of the cargo ship is not advantageous for us, as it is intended for defensive battles. For offensive battles, deployment is carried out by light fighter platforms
I will directly send ETSF (Air defense units (SBS-2, ZG-6) and artillery units (HLS-4, BFX-11)) to support you.
You guys choose one, or would you like to invite others to join?
@TheUltimatePlaneLover This issue will be considered in Phase II under "How to Conduct Maritime Interception," and it will also be the most challenging aspect of the entire war.
However, there is an option to skip Phase II and integrate it with Phase III.
The attack on Yeager Airport undoubtedly served to divert the enemy's attention, allowing us to further develop our technology... But why am I doing this?
Six months ago, during M-War II, I implemented the same strategy of counterattacking after the enemy's initial move. Yet, after enduring immense suffering on the front lines, the situation ended inconclusively. Now that we have completed the development of all weapons required for the first phase of the incident, why wait any longer?
Based on this, I propose the following plan:
We will launch tactical missiles from Wright Island to disable Bandit Airport, ensuring they lose control of the forward airfield and drawing enemy fire.
The young soldiers yearn to make achievements.
The old souls yearn to make achievements.
The new forces yearn to make achievements.
In short, Let The Fire Rise!
I have no objections—this is a perfect story.
However, I've been thinking: could there be some foreshadowing for the path in the cornfield earlier in the text?
@SilverTheDogfighter Though I might be certain of what you are referring to, I must remind you.
The term "Experimental" in "Second Experimental Outpost" was not added arbitrarily.
@Graingy ...Don't get hung up on this. Just remember it's a positive term, and I'll use "interesting" instead from now on.
Bro, as I said from the beginning, this is a superhero fantasy—I know what you're trying to write. Your comments were just supplementary explanations, and I understand you just wanted to draw people's attention to this superhuman.
But— I suggest you first make sure your writing reflects that intent. There's a serious disconnect between your core theme and the actual narrative.
"If it looks like a duck, swims like a duck, and quacks like a duck, then it is a duck."
You argue that she isn’t human, so she shouldn’t be lumped together with human dictators. Fair enough—human monarchs historically claimed "divine right" to legitimize their power. But you’ve simply brought the divine down to earth to justify centralized authority. In my view, there’s no real difference—you’ve just written out the ultimate fantasy of an absolute ruler. That’s nothing new.
Yes, I know that’s not what you intended—but intent isn’t everything. You can’t fully control how it’s perceived. Throughout human cultural history, the only reference we have for a state ruled by a single being of extraordinary power is absolute monarchy. The "superhuman" aspect is just a surface-level setting. What truly matters is how she’s portrayed. Take Star Wars—it’s sci-fi, but at its core, isn’t it just a story built around melee combat? You didn’t actually break away from centralized authoritarianism in your narrative, nor did you emphasize her truly transcendent qualities beyond human history. In essence, you unconsciously defaulted to the most convenient template: autocratic monarchy. Changing the outer shell doesn’t alter the core.
To be blunt, the issue really boils down to this: "Your current skill level isn’t yet a match for your ideas." But ironically, that’s what makes the whole story… "interesting." Thanks for your dedication to the art, but if your story needs a manual to be understood—maybe it’s time to go back to the drawing board.
@Graingy I'm very sorry, but my translator had a serious issue—the meaning of the last sentence was not what it appeared to be.
I just found it amusing that a "tsar" emerged in the Soviet Union. Clearly, he fits perfectly into your theme of absurdity, which is what I intended to praise, not criticize.
I don’t know what might have upset you, but what has interested me from the beginning is solely the absurdity of the entire story, not any political stance. Your comment has only heightened this absurdity, please allow me to elaborate on it in a piece of writing.
@Graingy Oh, then you must be an outstanding researcher.
The West has its performance-based governance, while China emphasizes the importance of connecting with the grassroots to win people's hearts. Isolated in the Kremlin, purging treacherous officials, maintaining good relations with subordinates, and single-handedly making the government efficient and clean—this almost divine presence. Apart from the Russians, I can't think of anyone else who could portray such a strong tsarist vibe.
A joke: the surface setting of this story is the New Soviet Union.
A very interesting story.
To be honest, at first, I didn’t quite understand what the story was about. Later, I realized that although it wears a Soviet exterior, it actually discusses the contrast between the appearance of a superman and his friendly inner self, while incorporating some absurd elements. In terms of writing, the character relationships are well-handled, the atmosphere is effectively built, and the details are rich.
Feedback? To be honest, it’s similar to the previous story—the beginning is a bit boring. I can understand that this is a slow-burn approach, focusing first on the environment, then the guards chatting, the office, and so on. Honestly, the atmosphere-building is quite good, but… I suppose I just don’t enjoy seeing this. This might be my issue, as I don’t read much serious literature. The core of the story doesn’t emerge until the door-blocking incident later on. I’m not sure how many people on this website would read that far.
As for suggestions… Well, if it were me, I’d try it in the style of Chinese web novels—placing the door-blocking incident at the very beginning. As the core event, it could effectively create suspense—why would someone do this?—and grab the reader’s attention. Then, the world-building information could be gradually revealed or inserted at appropriate moments. I think this would make the story more dramatic. But obviously, it would ruin the carefully crafted atmosphere and lose the intended feel, so I doubt you’d like it.
Ah, of course, I’m more interested in something else—you mentioned that political discussions are not allowed. I guess you might be referring to things related to the Soviet Union, among others. To be honest, after careful study, I know you intended to write about a superman-like character, but what came out seems even stranger… Of course, I can’t say for sure, but I have a good way to verify—Russian?
@TheUltimatePlaneLover This makes perfect sense—the ETSF took their time before departing, with all due events taking place in the interim.
Moreover, this better sets the stage for the “Disconnect” Protocol.
@TheUltimatePlaneLover For a defensive mission, my opinion is to have the artillery conduct sustained harassment, focusing attacks on the runway and hangars.
The area-denial capability of the short-range rocket artillery is essentially a score-farming game against the massive number of aircraft parked on the ground. We can't wait for them to take off before engaging, right?
Since I don't have time to write, and since their command authority lies with you, you will be the one to write it. If you require them, long-range rocket artillery and tactical missiles are also available for deployment. You can simply include them in the writing.
+1@M109Simp
+1@Karroc9522
@KPLBall
@TheMouse
@CrestelAeronautics
@MIGFOXHOUND31BSM26
@TheUltimatePlaneLover I have an exam imminent, so I don't have time to write out a full narrative. I'll simply state what happened.
The release of this piece signifies that ETSF has successfully landed and joined up with you. SCOURGE dispatched approximately 20 aircraft to intercept the transport ships, including laser-equipped units. All were eliminated without loss by the 6-plane Red Arrow Squadron, with each aircraft armed with five LT-15A long-range FT air-to-air missiles and two JP-2B auto-targeting gun pods. However, this also means the presence of the highly lethal JP-2B has been exposed; the current implications are unknown.
ETSF has replaced the BFX-11A with the BFX-13A and is tasked with supporting your operations.
We now need to decide on one issue: Should the artillery units conduct daily, sustained suppression of the bandit airfield, or launch a decisive, all-out assault at the start of the formal operation?
@SuperSuperTheSylph ?
+1bro i can't use youtube, what happened
@eggstick then throw me an egg for dinner
+1@eggstick why?
+1@Boeing727200F It's not that complicated.
@Boeing727200F Wait, what? How would I know where the main island is? That’s part of the main quest…
+1Hold on, what I meant is, according to the setting, it’s already established that so many aircraft can be crammed onto one island. They’ve already gone this far with it—there’s no need to nitpick over details in the lore.
@Boeing727200F A single floating island in the Scourge's home turf is already crammed with so many aircraft—there's really no need to worry about details like that.
+1@SimplyElegant 1. the SCOURGE war
2. M War II, It's merely a ceasefire, not the end.
@M109Simp
@Karroc9522
@KPLBall
@TheMouse
@CrestelAeronautics
@MIGFOXHOUND31BSM26
@TheUltimatePlaneLover
@TheUltimatePlaneLover This pertains to a world event, tagging others for attention.
@Boeing727200F no. The excessive size of the cargo ship is not advantageous for us, as it is intended for defensive battles. For offensive battles, deployment is carried out by light fighter platforms
@Boeing727200F my opinion
+1Correction: MDA airport was not occupied; that airport did not originally belong to them.
@TheUltimatePlaneLover Understood. Next, I need to roll a judgment die.
+1d100=57
OOPS, so close, but unfortunately...
@TheUltimatePlaneLover The trigger condition for Phase III is steadily tracking the enemy island.
+1@KPLBall can keep dreaming. Mach 10? I might as well just declare you the winner.
@Boeing727200F
TSW: The SCOURGE War
@TheUltimatePlaneLover Here are two options:
You guys choose one, or would you like to invite others to join?
@TheUltimatePlaneLover This issue will be considered in Phase II under "How to Conduct Maritime Interception," and it will also be the most challenging aspect of the entire war.
+1However, there is an option to skip Phase II and integrate it with Phase III.
Because I will be in my exam month, I won't have time to polish this story. My apologies.
@TheUltimatePlaneLover
This is truly unfortunate news.
The attack on Yeager Airport undoubtedly served to divert the enemy's attention, allowing us to further develop our technology... But why am I doing this?
Six months ago, during M-War II, I implemented the same strategy of counterattacking after the enemy's initial move. Yet, after enduring immense suffering on the front lines, the situation ended inconclusively. Now that we have completed the development of all weapons required for the first phase of the incident, why wait any longer?
Based on this, I propose the following plan:
We will launch tactical missiles from Wright Island to disable Bandit Airport, ensuring they lose control of the forward airfield and drawing enemy fire.
Additionally—change my tag to Reformist
@TheUltimatePlaneLover
@TheUltimatePlaneLover
The young soldiers yearn to make achievements.
+2The old souls yearn to make achievements.
The new forces yearn to make achievements.
In short, Let The Fire Rise!
Can I only make anti-ship weapons?
I have no objections—this is a perfect story.
+1However, I've been thinking: could there be some foreshadowing for the path in the cornfield earlier in the text?
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+1@SilverTheDogfighter oh ok
@SilverTheDogfighter Though I might be certain of what you are referring to, I must remind you.
The term "Experimental" in "Second Experimental Outpost" was not added arbitrarily.
@SilverTheDogfighter Antetus Alliance is my country
south wright, Antetus Alliance, Second Experimental Outpost.
@TheUltimatePlaneLover thanks bro!
+1@TheUltimatePlaneLover Bro, can I use your red series? I want to film a scrapped plot from TSW.
Happy birthday! 🍰
Excellent idea bro, it only needs a few tiny little adjustments to become practical, and I already have a solution ready.
@Graingy ...Don't get hung up on this. Just remember it's a positive term, and I'll use "interesting" instead from now on.
Bro, as I said from the beginning, this is a superhero fantasy—I know what you're trying to write. Your comments were just supplementary explanations, and I understand you just wanted to draw people's attention to this superhuman.
But— I suggest you first make sure your writing reflects that intent. There's a serious disconnect between your core theme and the actual narrative.
"If it looks like a duck, swims like a duck, and quacks like a duck, then it is a duck."
You argue that she isn’t human, so she shouldn’t be lumped together with human dictators. Fair enough—human monarchs historically claimed "divine right" to legitimize their power. But you’ve simply brought the divine down to earth to justify centralized authority. In my view, there’s no real difference—you’ve just written out the ultimate fantasy of an absolute ruler. That’s nothing new.
Yes, I know that’s not what you intended—but intent isn’t everything. You can’t fully control how it’s perceived. Throughout human cultural history, the only reference we have for a state ruled by a single being of extraordinary power is absolute monarchy. The "superhuman" aspect is just a surface-level setting. What truly matters is how she’s portrayed. Take Star Wars—it’s sci-fi, but at its core, isn’t it just a story built around melee combat? You didn’t actually break away from centralized authoritarianism in your narrative, nor did you emphasize her truly transcendent qualities beyond human history. In essence, you unconsciously defaulted to the most convenient template: autocratic monarchy. Changing the outer shell doesn’t alter the core.
To be blunt, the issue really boils down to this: "Your current skill level isn’t yet a match for your ideas." But ironically, that’s what makes the whole story… "interesting." Thanks for your dedication to the art, but if your story needs a manual to be understood—maybe it’s time to go back to the drawing board.
+1@Graingy For absurd: Art of the Absurd, Absurdist Art
@Graingy I'm very sorry, but my translator had a serious issue—the meaning of the last sentence was not what it appeared to be.
+1I just found it amusing that a "tsar" emerged in the Soviet Union. Clearly, he fits perfectly into your theme of absurdity, which is what I intended to praise, not criticize.
I don’t know what might have upset you, but what has interested me from the beginning is solely the absurdity of the entire story, not any political stance. Your comment has only heightened this absurdity, please allow me to elaborate on it in a piece of writing.
@Graingy Oh, then you must be an outstanding researcher.
+1The West has its performance-based governance, while China emphasizes the importance of connecting with the grassroots to win people's hearts. Isolated in the Kremlin, purging treacherous officials, maintaining good relations with subordinates, and single-handedly making the government efficient and clean—this almost divine presence. Apart from the Russians, I can't think of anyone else who could portray such a strong tsarist vibe.
A joke: the surface setting of this story is the New Soviet Union.
A very interesting story.
To be honest, at first, I didn’t quite understand what the story was about. Later, I realized that although it wears a Soviet exterior, it actually discusses the contrast between the appearance of a superman and his friendly inner self, while incorporating some absurd elements. In terms of writing, the character relationships are well-handled, the atmosphere is effectively built, and the details are rich.
Feedback? To be honest, it’s similar to the previous story—the beginning is a bit boring. I can understand that this is a slow-burn approach, focusing first on the environment, then the guards chatting, the office, and so on. Honestly, the atmosphere-building is quite good, but… I suppose I just don’t enjoy seeing this. This might be my issue, as I don’t read much serious literature. The core of the story doesn’t emerge until the door-blocking incident later on. I’m not sure how many people on this website would read that far.
As for suggestions… Well, if it were me, I’d try it in the style of Chinese web novels—placing the door-blocking incident at the very beginning. As the core event, it could effectively create suspense—why would someone do this?—and grab the reader’s attention. Then, the world-building information could be gradually revealed or inserted at appropriate moments. I think this would make the story more dramatic. But obviously, it would ruin the carefully crafted atmosphere and lose the intended feel, so I doubt you’d like it.
Ah, of course, I’m more interested in something else—you mentioned that political discussions are not allowed. I guess you might be referring to things related to the Soviet Union, among others. To be honest, after careful study, I know you intended to write about a superman-like character, but what came out seems even stranger… Of course, I can’t say for sure, but I have a good way to verify—Russian?
+1Congratulation for 100k!
+1@TheUltimatePlaneLover … Bro, I thought you lost the plane..That's a pretty cool idea.
+1bro what's happened?
+1