@LunarEclipseSP @Graingy Please do not fill the area above the signs on the mountain, I want to see if I can convincingly make it look like a slope (since it isn't in cross section there).
@TheLoadingGorilla Thank you, and thank you for your response. Curious what your preferred style is?
The opening part with more descriptive language (which can be seen in several of my previous stories) serves three main purposes.
1: Outline's the character's worldview, giving insight into how she (and her kind) are.
2: As you guessed, it gets things moving. It can help generate momentum in writing.
3: It is intended to hook the reader. Start strong to get them in, end strong to leave a good impression. That's the goal, at least, like a literary shit sandwich ;)
The word count thing is something I have to wrestle with a bit insofar as its purpose. These multi-thousand word stories are fundamentally different than shorter forms in what they can contain and do, so trying to minimize word count wherever possible just isn't really what they're supposed to be. Of course, it's fine if that's not somebody's preference (that's what a preference is, after all), just that going into more detail and more abstract ideas is the point of these longer stories. This is doubly true for setting/character introductions, such as this one. These sort of occupy a middle ground between short stories and series anyways. Too disconnected to be part of one story, but too connected to be completely independently viewed - yet they still need to explain themselves enough for someone who hasn't read all the others.
Considering this is completely outside the purpose of this website, there's going to be some challenges.
I do have some shorter stories, in case that'd be more your speed.
@Boeing727200F They're allowing a portal, which I've already made. Not ideal, since people will still pass over us, but at least it won't be in the corner.
It's the best we're likely going to get, I wouldn't push it.
@Ashdenpaw1 Length is rather typical for a short story, however I understand that for the site it's rather long. Mouse has told me they think the Hundred-Words fit better. As that's inherent to the type of story this is it unfortunately can't really be helped, but I suppose I'll take this as a sign to make more shorter ones. What length range do you think would be better? Was the Halloween story (a Five-Hundred-Word) a better length?
Thank you, though I'm curious what you mean by "the idea"? You mean the tank mech part? Or sentient war machines in general? Or a retired war machine? Or something else?
And I'm entirely unsurprised that you would want to kill them. I didn't say that about the cave for nothing on that other post. You are a threat to public health. May you never have an executioner's axe at your command, for you would have a reign which rows through the years on a river of blood.
@Boeing727200F Anything can be made funny, but I agree that most of the time 9/11 jokes are poorly done and unfunny. At most those can have a second of shock value.
@TheLoadingGorilla I've been here for years and I'm still an idiot.
@Boeing727200F Hm.
Well, long story short the moron decided to test the moderators on SP and J:NO. Eventually they posted some cheap 9/11 joke on J:NO and got banned. Of course, since they're the same account it also affected SP.
Everyone called them foolish for that.
@Boeing727200F Hm, they're banned again? May've said something mean to the wrong person, they've said rather unkind things to me.
And I swear to all if you so much as touch a watercolour set I'm liquifying you.
@Ashdenpaw1 This thing took longer to make than I'd like to repeat. That said...
OrangeConnor2 is now Subsere, a company account.
You... actually haven't really changed at all going off the description here. I still don't trust you as a spelunker.
Who knows if Mouse is still relativistic. I don't.
TheUltimatePlaneLover hasn't been doing much war stuff recently last I checked.
Majakalona has had so much change about them I don't even know what their deal is anymore. I was legitimately suspicious they were a different person for a while.
I've no idea if Yaris is still a shapeshifter.
Boeing is no longer a plane and is now a paint-incompetent furry.
B1 is a fascist (and thus someone I refuse to talk to or make mention of).
SILVERPANZER isn't so much a cultist anymore, and I honestly just find them annoying at this point.
And, of course, all this is ignoring the many PFP changes. Only TUPL, Monarchii, Randomplayer, and I still use the same PFPs.
Definitely outdated, but I couldn't be bothered line everything up and resize pictures again.
@LunarEclipseSP Can't say I know what you're referring to...
@Boeing727200F FYI apparently you don't need to have the flag visible to get the return bonus, so you can take it off if you don't want to be mistaken for a canuck.
@LunarEclipseSP Hope it's not impolite...
@Boeing727200F Just keep reporting on WPlace. I've gotten a number of notifications about reports being taken seriously (though only a fraction of those I've sent). All were on large NSFW artwork, though. Who knows if some tiny area in BC will get that sort of policing attention for griefing. Probably not.
@LunarEclipseSP As an aside...
Of course, your English isn't perfect. You've addressed this in the past, it's not super important, I don't really care. Intelligible enough 99% of the time, that's what matters.
However, corrections are important to improving at a language (or anything, really). Would it be rude to correct mistakes (such as that)? Or should I not say anything?
@Boeing727200F I think the responses speak to the fact he did something. They can't hide those.
@LunarEclipseSP And then they'll report you for greifing. Just report their account and pray WPlace's dogshit moderation does something for once.
To add, fucker destroyed my original tiny Graingy logo. Do NOT repair, I'm leaving it as evidence.
You hear me? Do NOT repair it.
@pobondo oh right.
+1So, what did you do? Terrorism again?
I’ve been on the internet too long to be comfortable with this
+1This is RAW!
+1It needs PASSION!
Wonder!
... I am a moron and tagged myself.
+1Boeing, see below comment. That goes for you too, please.
@OverlordPrime Seems a bit silly.
+1@LunarEclipseSP @Graingy Please do not fill the area above the signs on the mountain, I want to see if I can convincingly make it look like a slope (since it isn't in cross section there).
+1I never download anything (never have the time), I just think it looks nice.
+1I come here
+1And all I see are whippersnappers
all of you
each and every one of you
Well, that's pretty.
+1Laugh track
+1@TheLoadingGorilla Thank you, and thank you for your response. Curious what your preferred style is?
+1The opening part with more descriptive language (which can be seen in several of my previous stories) serves three main purposes.
1: Outline's the character's worldview, giving insight into how she (and her kind) are.
2: As you guessed, it gets things moving. It can help generate momentum in writing.
3: It is intended to hook the reader. Start strong to get them in, end strong to leave a good impression. That's the goal, at least, like a literary shit sandwich ;)
The word count thing is something I have to wrestle with a bit insofar as its purpose. These multi-thousand word stories are fundamentally different than shorter forms in what they can contain and do, so trying to minimize word count wherever possible just isn't really what they're supposed to be. Of course, it's fine if that's not somebody's preference (that's what a preference is, after all), just that going into more detail and more abstract ideas is the point of these longer stories. This is doubly true for setting/character introductions, such as this one. These sort of occupy a middle ground between short stories and series anyways. Too disconnected to be part of one story, but too connected to be completely independently viewed - yet they still need to explain themselves enough for someone who hasn't read all the others.
Considering this is completely outside the purpose of this website, there's going to be some challenges.
I do have some shorter stories, in case that'd be more your speed.
We're all taking a bite out of this bad boy
+1Yancy did not like that
+1No idea. I've never so much as touched Python.
+1And I doubt that, seeing as AFAIK FT doesn't have variables like that. Only input variables from parts.
@Boeing727200F They're allowing a portal, which I've already made. Not ideal, since people will still pass over us, but at least it won't be in the corner.
+1It's the best we're likely going to get, I wouldn't push it.
In what? I don't think FT has variables like that, so what language are you referring to?
+1@WaterFlavouredSpitfires You now have Wright AIDS
+1@Boeing727200F well that’s annoying.
+1@LunarEclipseSP Yeah it’s been for a few days now. Got Sbina and everything.
@Boeing727200F where’s that?
+1IT STARTS IN FUCKING SAN FRANSISCO
+1@LunarEclipseSP Hopefully not. Unfortunately not much we can do...
+1Let's hope they move on.
@Boeing727200F Well yeah. Got a bunker going.
F
+1@Ashdenpaw1 Length is rather typical for a short story, however I understand that for the site it's rather long. Mouse has told me they think the Hundred-Words fit better. As that's inherent to the type of story this is it unfortunately can't really be helped, but I suppose I'll take this as a sign to make more shorter ones. What length range do you think would be better? Was the Halloween story (a Five-Hundred-Word) a better length?
+1Thank you, though I'm curious what you mean by "the idea"? You mean the tank mech part? Or sentient war machines in general? Or a retired war machine? Or something else?
And I'm entirely unsurprised that you would want to kill them. I didn't say that about the cave for nothing on that other post. You are a threat to public health. May you never have an executioner's axe at your command, for you would have a reign which rows through the years on a river of blood.
@Boeing727200F It's a real place, believe it or not.
+1I was surprised to learn that when going over maps to write this.
spoingy boingy sproingy
+1@jamesPLANESii 14 is just around the corner at least
+1car
+1@Cabbage17 hehe stupid voice
+1@Boeing727200F … MOTHERFUCKER
+1@TheLoadingGorilla You speak my language.
+1@Boeing727200F Anything can be made funny, but I agree that most of the time 9/11 jokes are poorly done and unfunny. At most those can have a second of shock value.
+1@TheLoadingGorilla I've been here for years and I'm still an idiot.
@Boeing727200F Hm.
+1Well, long story short the moron decided to test the moderators on SP and J:NO. Eventually they posted some cheap 9/11 joke on J:NO and got banned. Of course, since they're the same account it also affected SP.
Everyone called them foolish for that.
@Boeing727200F Hm, they're banned again? May've said something mean to the wrong person, they've said rather unkind things to me.
+1And I swear to all if you so much as touch a watercolour set I'm liquifying you.
@Ashdenpaw1 This thing took longer to make than I'd like to repeat. That said...
+1OrangeConnor2 is now Subsere, a company account.
You... actually haven't really changed at all going off the description here. I still don't trust you as a spelunker.
Who knows if Mouse is still relativistic. I don't.
TheUltimatePlaneLover hasn't been doing much war stuff recently last I checked.
Majakalona has had so much change about them I don't even know what their deal is anymore. I was legitimately suspicious they were a different person for a while.
I've no idea if Yaris is still a shapeshifter.
Boeing is no longer a plane and is now a paint-incompetent furry.
B1 is a fascist (and thus someone I refuse to talk to or make mention of).
SILVERPANZER isn't so much a cultist anymore, and I honestly just find them annoying at this point.
And, of course, all this is ignoring the many PFP changes. Only TUPL, Monarchii, Randomplayer, and I still use the same PFPs.
Definitely outdated, but I couldn't be bothered line everything up and resize pictures again.
@ChaseRacliot ooh
+1@Boeing727200F I see.
+1Well excuse me I'm just stupid
@ChaseRacliot Wait what.
+1WTM? War Thunder Mobile?
Ohh wait is "M12" a tablet?
@ChaseRacliot HOW!?
+1Ohhh you mean a challenge.
+1Well, guess I'll put away the wearable sign...
@LunarEclipseSP right, that unsightly abomination…
+1@LunarEclipseSP Can't say I know what you're referring to...
+1@Boeing727200F FYI apparently you don't need to have the flag visible to get the return bonus, so you can take it off if you don't want to be mistaken for a canuck.
@SuperSuperTheSylph More firecrackers
+1@LunarEclipseSP Hope it's not impolite...
+1@Boeing727200F Just keep reporting on WPlace. I've gotten a number of notifications about reports being taken seriously (though only a fraction of those I've sent). All were on large NSFW artwork, though. Who knows if some tiny area in BC will get that sort of policing attention for griefing. Probably not.
@LunarEclipseSP As an aside...
+1Of course, your English isn't perfect. You've addressed this in the past, it's not super important, I don't really care. Intelligible enough 99% of the time, that's what matters.
However, corrections are important to improving at a language (or anything, really). Would it be rude to correct mistakes (such as that)? Or should I not say anything?
@LunarEclipseSP Leave. The word is leave.
+1@Boeing727200F I think the responses speak to the fact he did something. They can't hide those.
+1@LunarEclipseSP And then they'll report you for greifing. Just report their account and pray WPlace's dogshit moderation does something for once.
To add, fucker destroyed my original tiny Graingy logo. Do NOT repair, I'm leaving it as evidence.
You hear me? Do NOT repair it.
@LunarEclipseSP I saw one appear right before my (metaphorical) eyes.
+1Commented on it.
tamk
+1box
+1@LunarEclipseSP Truly
+1