-Combat record: Was it good at it's job? The F-35 may be great now, but if push comes to shove and it is unable to accomplish it's mission, then it wasn't a great aircraft
-Cost: Was it worth the cost? Was it good for the pilots? More or less was it worth it for the military and . If a long range fighter is uncomfortable, then pilots will be at a disadvantage and limited. If it cost too much or uses rare materials, then it's limited by production.
-Adaptability: Was it able to adapt to new and better fighters? An example would be the Zero. It was great in the beginning of ww2 but became outclassed by newer american aircraft.
Also, please don't tag the followers. Ill do it as they asked me too. I have nothing against it but I just don't want people constantly tagging them for different stuff.
@WiiMini Its just my criticism, feel free to use it if you want. If not, thats up to you. Im just happy to see more people writing their own SP Explained. Also, you don't need to ask me to write a SP Explained post. Well, for now you don't need to. Im afraid someone might use the SP Explained name to make a bad post (bad being against the rules). However, you don't need to ask. Just tag me if you ever write another one.
However, I do have a few topics I would like to take notes of. First,
while the topics go together, the paragraphs are somewhat hard to read. This is a hard thing to do consistently as a writer, so don't let it get you down. For your case, I believe it's due to a lack of experience in writing these types of longer post.
One way to fix this is to use a more formal tone. You use an informal tone in this forum, which is fine. However, I feel in your case, it takes away from the post and distracts the reader. An example of this was here, "coughs German Corsair coughs. But that was a one off."
I feel it was unneeded and took away from the point you were trying to make. I would write it as this,
"While a few designs made out of blocks become popular, such as the German Corsair, it is extremely rare. You will have a much better chance using fuselage parts."
Also try to stay away from jokes for now. Jokes require you to know your audience and proper timing. Since this is your first SP Explained, I suggest in the future you stay away from it before cracking a few jokes.
Another thing you can do is make it easier to read. Large walls of text and simple sentences are hard on the eyes. You can fix this by using more complex sentences and by spacing your large paragraphs into smaller ones.
Your more recent builds look like little things you have put together to experiment with and posted, which is fine. However, I am sure the community would like to see more complex designs and dedicated projects
@thebanbehindtheslaughter Im sure I can handle myself. I have rped against more challenging users in much more realistic rps. This is just a chill rp for me
@thebanbehindtheslaughter You will learn over time that no army is able to protect everything at once. Your only option then is to defend higher value targets and risk losing the lower valued ones.
First time?
+2Combat record, Cost, and Adaptability
-Combat record: Was it good at it's job? The F-35 may be great now, but if push comes to shove and it is unable to accomplish it's mission, then it wasn't a great aircraft
-Cost: Was it worth the cost? Was it good for the pilots? More or less was it worth it for the military and . If a long range fighter is uncomfortable, then pilots will be at a disadvantage and limited. If it cost too much or uses rare materials, then it's limited by production.
-Adaptability: Was it able to adapt to new and better fighters? An example would be the Zero. It was great in the beginning of ww2 but became outclassed by newer american aircraft.
+1@NormalPioneer no, they must be real people
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@WiiMini Welcome to the jungle?
@Ormalawayo Bruh, I literally am playing it on my gameboy right now
+1Please make it gameboy compatible
+1You know when you have achieved bad ass when you tell the guy get out of my line of sight
"My next forum post similar to this will analyze the inner workings of your entire operation in the forums. "
it would be cool if someone went around and did an analysis about some users, even doing interviews with them.
@50CalChicken Lmao, it's fine. I stole it off discord but don't tell no one
Pls don't send me to vietnam next
@SuperRoto Unless you are in a middle of a war with germany
@WiiMini Pls, they say I don't have enough points to leave. Get me out!
I mean why do you think platinum is black instead of silverish. It's clearly made from the void left inside of the user after they achieve it
+1You sell your soul to Andrew and he will enlighten you
Yo, look at this cool selfie I got with the SCP. I guess it didn't like the flash because it's covering it's face and screaming
The numbers remind me of star locations
"RA 6h 45m 9s | Dec -16° 42′"
@MemeLordMASTERMEMES Nvm, nice MBT
Nooooo!
"My next forum post similar to this will analyze the inner workings of your entire operation in the forums."
Please don't report my illegal upvote factory which runs on child labor to the mods!
@WiiMini Please don't send me to rocket man
@KangaKangaTheRoo Please don't send me to brazil! I been good!
+1Please don't post it, I just outranked you and I don't want to be sent back to the 21st user page.
+1Also, please don't tag the followers. Ill do it as they asked me too. I have nothing against it but I just don't want people constantly tagging them for different stuff.
@WiiMini Its just my criticism, feel free to use it if you want. If not, thats up to you. Im just happy to see more people writing their own SP Explained. Also, you don't need to ask me to write a SP Explained post. Well, for now you don't need to. Im afraid someone might use the SP Explained name to make a bad post (bad being against the rules). However, you don't need to ask. Just tag me if you ever write another one.
@Learpot I will become a god
However, I do have a few topics I would like to take notes of. First,
while the topics go together, the paragraphs are somewhat hard to read. This is a hard thing to do consistently as a writer, so don't let it get you down. For your case, I believe it's due to a lack of experience in writing these types of longer post.
One way to fix this is to use a more formal tone. You use an informal tone in this forum, which is fine. However, I feel in your case, it takes away from the post and distracts the reader. An example of this was here,
"coughs German Corsair coughs. But that was a one off."
I feel it was unneeded and took away from the point you were trying to make. I would write it as this,
"While a few designs made out of blocks become popular, such as the German Corsair, it is extremely rare. You will have a much better chance using fuselage parts."
Also try to stay away from jokes for now. Jokes require you to know your audience and proper timing. Since this is your first SP Explained, I suggest in the future you stay away from it before cracking a few jokes.
Another thing you can do is make it easier to read. Large walls of text and simple sentences are hard on the eyes. You can fix this by using more complex sentences and by spacing your large paragraphs into smaller ones.
+1This is nice, I like how it manages to touch multiple topics and combine them together.
Thank goodness, Im finally out of Brazil
@Learpot If they buff forum points Im gonna become unstoppable
@WiiMini By hosting it you write the article and then post it, this is how it's been done in the past
@masotan15 Welcome
+1@WiiMini Sure
@WiiMini Tempting offer
That minecraft fire gif looks real familiar...
They look nice either way
Your more recent builds look like little things you have put together to experiment with and posted, which is fine. However, I am sure the community would like to see more complex designs and dedicated projects
Pls nerf
+1The return of the king
+1@thebanbehindtheslaughter Yes
Reliance on someone else for defense means you're at their mercy, which is bad for a country
@thebanbehindtheslaughter Im sure I can handle myself. I have rped against more challenging users in much more realistic rps. This is just a chill rp for me
When you joined the rp and already have someone trying to attack you
This is where the fun begins
+1@thebanbehindtheslaughter You will learn over time that no army is able to protect everything at once. Your only option then is to defend higher value targets and risk losing the lower valued ones.
never, it will probably become something like the flu
@thebanbehindtheslaughter So an economic alliance? If you make it mutual defense Im in
I regret reaching her on lunatic lol
@WiiMini How realistic is this RP?
@thebanbehindtheslaughter WiiMini sent me to brazil
@thebanbehindtheslaughter Please be more specific